Thursday, September 22, 2011

May someone please critique my essay?





In “The Gospel of Food” by Barry Glassner believe that a fast food industry changes our culture with food and health issues. The poor, middle class, and adolescents fall in the category of the ethnic restaurant that is cheap. Now a day, people are getting to lazy to take time to at least make a sandwich or to use their manners without grabbing the food with their hands. Society will always change their culture, it does not matter if someone eats a burger with there hands or dine at a place where the food is cheap. Attending daily to a fast food area is a problem people need to learn how to limit there cravings for a hamburger.



Malnutrition has always been a problem in the community. As Bailey Burritt states that bad eating habits occur by “ignorance not poverty”. Anyone has the choice to eat a healthy and a balanced diet. Taking time to cook a meal for the family prevents issues with food crisis. Food poisoning always occurs at a fast food their products are not healthy. These food are kept processed, who knows if the meat is not spoiled. Children spend most of there time at the fast food chains and less in activities. Obesity, heart disease, and high cholesterol happen frequently when consuming fast food daily. Social status is changing because of these restaurants. Foreigners that come to America experience the difference of food and culture. Adolescent from France, prefer “self service aspect, absence of table settings, utensils, and the usual rules of etiquette%26quot;. The French tradition is to always eat at the fanciest restaurant with utensils and a posture of high class.



I’m of two minds about Barry Glassner’s claim that the food chain changes our customs with food and health. On one hand, I agree that society is changing their habits with food and our health problem has increased. On the other hand, I’m not sure if we should make a big deal of how people act or eat. When someone enters a fast food area, sits down expecting a waiter/waitress to take their order. That is not going to happen, these areas improves personal skills of doing things on your own. Utensils and the rules of manners do not play a part with a hamburger. Imagine someone using a fork for a hamburger. Would this seem strange or awkward? Of course they would seem awkward and strange. The only time proper manners should occur is at home, school, or a fancy restaurant. Health dilemma, there is no excuse for not feeding your child with healthy food. I understand single mothers have to work double shift to maintain a roof over their child’s head. That is not an excuse for being lazy or taking time to teach your child to prepare something easy and healthy. A mother complicates matters further when she writes, “My husband left us a few years ago and it’s just me and my son now. I work different shifts over at the hospital and don’t have much time to cook.” In other words, this mother believes that it is alright to feed their child every day fast food. This mother is a nurse as a RN they should know that fast food is bad for a child.



Although I agree with Barry Glassner up to a point, I still suggest that the main focus should be on health issues and not how people act when their socializing at these type of places. If mothers would stop to think about their child, not their job, they would realize the risk that may develop into obesity, heart disease, and high cholesterol. Manners at a fast food chain are ridiculous, people choose the way they want to act or eat. Glassner should stop worrying about changes in our behavior and focus more on other important facts.

May someone please critique my essay?well, its not bad. there are a few spelling errors and the paper doesnt flow too well, but id say its like a B but possibly a C. id maybe work on better diction and varying sentence length and structure.May someone please critique my essay?In “The Gospel of Food” by Barry Glassner believe that a fast - believe isn't the right word if you're starting with %26quot;In%26quot;, maybe %26quot;states his belief%26quot;...

Now a day, people are getting to lazy to - That's a phrase that comes out better in spoken English than written, you'll want to be a little more formal when writing - %26quot;Currently%26quot; or %26quot;Modern-day people...%26quot;

Society will always change their culture, - society and culture are singular, not a they or their.

it does not matter if someone eats a burger with there hands or dine at a place where the food is cheap - wrong there and it you're still singular here. You can choose to use %26quot;his%26quot; or %26quot;her%26quot; or %26quot;his/her%26quot; and dines at a place...

Attending daily to a fast food area is a problem people need to learn how to limit there cravings for a hamburger. - %26quot;Attending daily to%26quot; means more to take care of something and you have 2 independent clauses here. break them up with a . or ;. Maybe you mean Daily frequenting fast food areas...





I'll see if I can help more later, i have to get back to work ;)